Technological innovations have negatively affected our lives. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is commonly argued that
the
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innovations
of
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in
technology
have given some negative effects to
our Change preposition
on
lives
. Personally, I can neither completely agree nor disagree with this
statement for a variety of reasons.
I partly agree that our lives
are affected negatively by the
technological Correct article usage
apply
innovations
. One of the main reasons can be that today, somebody seem
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seems
is
spending too much of their time Change the verb form
to be
on
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a smartphone
smartphone
or Fix the agreement mistake
smartphones
computer
, Fix the agreement mistake
computers
therefore
it can cause some negative effects to
their health like Change preposition
on
near-sighted
or even can kill them. Add a missing verb
being near-sighted
For instance
, on website
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the website
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,
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apply
died
2 days ago after he had been playing Correct pronoun usage
who died
game
without sleeping or Fix the agreement mistake
games
eatting
for 3 days. Another reason can be that nowadays people seem Correct your spelling
eating
be
using Add the particle
to be
Internet
as a Add an article
the Internet
tools
to spread fake news or fraudulent appropriation of assets. Correct the article-noun agreement
tool
For example
, in 2021 when Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of Covid 19 pandemic victims were growing Fix the agreement mistake
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everyday
in Viet Nam and everybody Replace the word
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mustsn’t
go out without some special case, someone used Change the modal
mustn’t
Internet
to spread fake news about Add an article
the Internet
magical
effect of a drug which is known as a holy drug can make SARS-CoV-2 disappear; Correct article usage
the magical
therefore
the cost of that drug is grown dramatically to near 5 million dong
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dongs
however
it really just is usual cold medicines my grandparent wasted 5000000 on it.
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,however
On the other hand
, I disagree with the viewpoint
that technological Replace the word
view
innovations
just give some negative effects to
our Change preposition
on
lives
. Firstly
, technology
can bring so much
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many
for
our life. Change preposition
to
This
is because Internet
is so useful for Add an article
the Internet
student
in studying if they use it profitably and don’t waste their time Fix the agreement mistake
students
for
games. Change preposition
on
For example
, my brother namely Vu is really success reach to top 1 of his school with two hours self-study
on Change preposition
of self-study
Internet
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the Internet
everyday
. Correct your spelling
every day
Secondly
, some technology
tools can be used as a good way to entertain and relax if they know when they need to stop. For instance
, according to
psychology research psychologist show data that game online or social media can help people relax effectively and decrease 80% stress if it is use
profitably.
In conclusion, Change the verb form
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although
someone believe
that Technological Change the verb form
believes
innovations
have negatively affected our lives
, I’m convinced that technology
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technological
innovations
bring both advantages and negative effect to our life however
it is possitive
or negative depend Correct your spelling
positive
to
our Change preposition
on
useway
everything is good but in moderation.Correct your spelling
causeway
use way
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