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The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities

The chart below shows the result of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities
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The bar charts compare
a
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apply
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survey results of drinking habits in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks which are buying
coffee
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 and tea buying in five
differents
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different
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city
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cities
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of
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in
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 Australia.
Overall
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, in the
last
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 4 weeks, the survey
result
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results
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 state that most of the residents in Sydney,
Melbourne
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,
Brisbane
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, and Hobart prefer to
went
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 to a cafe for drinking tea or
coffee
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, following the
remain
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 categories which are bought instant
coffee
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 and bought fresh
coffee
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, respectively.
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, it is the reverse for
people
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 in Adelaide, which are love to
bought
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buy
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instand
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instant
coffee
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, even
tough
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though
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 the difference is
slightly
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 to
peoples
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people
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 whose like to
went
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go
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 to café. In terms
drinking
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of drinking
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 habits, went to a café mostly
diminati
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dominated
 by communities in
Melbourne
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 and Hobart with the highest percentage among all
which
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about almost 65%,
following
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followed
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with
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by
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people
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 in
Sydey
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Sydney
 at a little over 60%,
Brisbane
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 at 55%, and the least is Adelaide at just 50% and almost have the same amount of
people
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 who like to
bought
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buy
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 instant
coffee
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 for about 50%. The next category which is bought
instants
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instant
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coffee
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 with Hobart’s
people
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have
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 the highest percentage to almost 50%,
following
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followed
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with
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by
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Brisbane
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,
Melbourne
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, and Sydney at 53%, 49%, and 46%, respectively. And the least
favorable
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favourable
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 habit category is
bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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. Sydney
have
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has
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 the most enthusiast
which
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about 44%, following the
others
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 city there are
Melbourne
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, Hobart, Adelaide, and
Brisbane
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 at 43%, 38%, 34,5%, and 34%, respectively.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, melbourne, brisbane, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • preference
  • beverage
  • caffeine
  • demographics
  • trend
  • survey
  • cultural significance
  • habit
  • seasonal variation
  • health consciousness
  • availability
  • implications
  • urban vs. rural consumption
  • data interpretation
  • quantitative analysis
  • fluctuations
  • patterns
  • peak times
  • economical impact
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