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the graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018

the graph below shows the number of shops that closed in the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018
#shops #country
The line graph illustrates the
amount
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 of
shops
 which are closed in
the
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terms of the
amount
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number
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 of new
shops
 that are opening in a country between 2011 and 2018.
Overall
, the fluctuation graph of
shops
 that closed and opened is almost alike. The new
stores
 that
are
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opened in 2011
outweight
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outweighed
 the
amount
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number
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 of
stores
 which are closed,
whereas
 it is
a
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reverse
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reversed
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 in 2018. In terms of
amout
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amount
 of
the
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shops
, the
shops
 that closed in 2011 are over 6.000 even
tough
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 it
finally
decreasing
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decreased
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 to 6000 in 2012 but it is facing
the
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 upward trend to about a little over 7000 in 2013. The closed
stores
 become unpopular
therefore
 the
amount
 of it is extremely decreased to almost 500 before it is rising hardly
at
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in
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 2016 by 5.000 and
remain
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remained
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 the same
at
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in
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 2018.
On the other hand
,
new
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newly
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 opened
stored
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 became commonly popular
at
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in
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 2011 for about a little below 9000
shops
 before it roughly
decreasing
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decreased
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 to 4000
at
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in
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 2012 and fluctuated until 2015 with the same
amount
 of
shops
that
is
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opened in 2012. Between 2015 and 2017
are
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the years
which
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in which
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amount
 of opened
stores
are
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is
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 stable
for
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at
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 about 4000.
In
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 the end of
given
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a given
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 period, it
is
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slightly decreased to the 3000
shops
 that are opened
on
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in
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 2018.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, shops, stores with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • decline
  • surge
  • stabilize
  • correlation
  • economic conditions
  • consumer behavior
  • technological advancements
  • urban development
  • employment
  • retail sector
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