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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much
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The pie charts illustrated the average proportion of different
meals
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 consisting of three types of nutrients in the USA and it is noted that consuming too much of these nutrients In
meals
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 can impact the health of our body.
Overall
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, people in the USA have
breakfast
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 and
snacks
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 consisting of most
of
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added sugar,
on the other hand
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 in their
lunch
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 and
dinner
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 mostly consist of sodium. In terms of each type of nutrient, Sodium is the most added ingredient in
dinner
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 for about 43%, followed by
lunch
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,
breakfast
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, and
snacks
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 which are about 29%, 14%, and 14%, respectively.
Likewise
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 saturated fat is one of the components in
meals
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,
dinner
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 becomes the most consistent of it for about 37%, followed by
lunch
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 and
snacks
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 for about 26% and 21%, respectively. And the least consistent
meals
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 is in
breakfast
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 with just only 16%.
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 for added sugar in
meals
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,
snacks
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 are having most of it almost half (42%), followed by
dinner
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 consist by 23%, and the
meals
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 that commonly consisted of less sugar
breakfast
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 about 16%, and
lunch
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 about 19%
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "on the other hand".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words meals, breakfast, snacks, lunch, dinner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Nutrients
  • Unhealthy
  • Daily intake
  • Percentage
  • Carbohydrates
  • Fats
  • Proteins
  • Meals
  • Balanced diet
  • Consumption
  • Excess
  • Health implications
  • Obesity
  • Diabetes
  • Heart disease
  • Convenience foods
  • Fast foods
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Healthy eating habits
  • Dietary recommendations
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