It is difficult for people who live in cities to get enough physical exercise. What causes and solutions can be taken to solve the problem?
Doing
exercise
can be difficult for the people
who live in a city. I think this
is partly due to
the facilities offered by the city. In other words
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,words
people
who live in a city have much more chance to access technology and it can be the reason for getting lazy. If the government encourage people
to do exercise
the problem
might be solved.
To some extent using technology might be beneficial. On the other hand
, sometimes it can be the reason for getting lazy. To clarify, nowadays people
do not willing to use
their physical mobility because there are some technological gadgets which can do it instead
of themselves. If they had not been invented, citizens would have had to use
their physical power. However
, it is not possible nowadays. As a result
of this
, people
's mobility rates face with drastic decrease while
humanity's use
of technology rates increase. For example
, technological devices such
as escalators and elevators are not used in the suburbs so villagers have to use
stairs.In order to ,this
their physical mobility is much higher than others.
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do this
To begin
with, the most detrimental effect of the above situation is the potential for the number of people
struggling with obesity to rise. This
will be dangerous for individuals so it should be fixed. A way to fix that problem
would be to encourage people
to do sports. Therefore
the government should raise awareness. Thus
people
might learn the possible results of lack of exercise
. The government can use
some methods to fix that problem
such
as advertisements. If there were public announcements about the results of lack of exercise
on TV people
would imagine themselves as a person who acted in this
announcement. Then
they might tend to change their unhealthy lifestyle with a more exercised life. Another way to fix that problem
would be to encourage people
to use
healthier transportation ways for instance
biking or walking. If some advantages were given to people
who use
these transportation methods, others would prefer these too. For example
, in Correct article usage
the Netherlands
Netherlands
the state encourages Add a comma
,Netherlands
people
to use
bikes and also
the state raised other vehicles
taxes. After that Change the noun form
vehicle
people
started to use
bikes and nowadays most people
use
them rather than cars.
In conclusion, people
have been struggling with some hassles in cities because of cities' features which force people
to be lazy. On the
contrary
it might not be a permanent Add a comma
,contrary
problem
if the steps I mentioned in the third paragraph were used.Submitted by yunussemreozkaya on
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