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Nowadays we produce a large amount of rubbish. What can be down diminish it?

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In contemporary society, the proliferation of rubbish has become a dangerous issue in various
form
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 in our lives. It is not hard to find that sidewalks and streets are covered with trash all day. It
does
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not only
destroy
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 the view of the city but
also
 introduces the human sense of responsibility to the nature and environment. In the following paragraphs, I will explore the reasons behind the rising quantity of junk and possible solutions to reduce
this
 issue. If you take a closer look at the trash on the road, you will find it mostly comes from the products that
people
 buy
such
 as containers and plastic bags can easily be found in the near restaurants. There are various ways to prevent
waste
 generation.
Firstly
,
people
 should suspend to use of plastic bags.
For example
, for shopping individuals can use cloth bags for the products and equipment that they buy.
Secondly
, when an electronic device is damaged, first we should repair it and prevent from buying a new device. Because, in
this
way
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 humans can control their consumption in their lives. The third solution is using
from recycling
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 products to diminish the produced
waste
.
For instance
, in shopping
people
 must pay attention to buying recycled goods
instead
 of non-recyclable tools.
Furthermore
, in
this
 issue, the government plays a significant role in the downward trend of
waste
 production. Government managers can take control of
waste
 production by adopting encouraging and progressive plans for society. As a case in point, they can organize workshops for teaching crowds to how segregate garbage from its origin. Using
composting
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 process can be considered an effective method. In conclusion,
although
, during these years we have seen an increase in
waste
 in the world it is possible to reduce
waste
 production with the solutions provided by the government and
also
 with the help of
people
, organizations and companies.
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