Some people prefer to directly help or support people who need it in the local community. However, others prefer to give money to the national or international charities. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. Give your opinion.

Helping
people
in need is the most noble work a person can do. Some
people
opine that helping someone in pain at the same moment is more important than donating
money
at
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charitable institutions nationally or internationally.Both
view points
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have
there
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Own valid reasons that will be discussed in forthcoming paragraphs before giving my opinion. crowd feel a sense of self-worthiness by rendering a helping hand to
crowd
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in pain. They feel happy when they volunteer
themselves
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as a social worker at
hospitals
caring for elderly or disabled denizens. To exemplify, I consider myself blessed when I go to
day care
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hospitals
in my free time to take care of old
people
with their medicines and other
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activities. I feel that I have done something towards my community.
Hence
, volunteering in
hospitals
or
people
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in need inculcates a sense of satisfaction . There are others who think that
money
plays a great role in serving
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society. No doubt, there are cases where
people
who are not rich could not afford monetary help to save their family
member
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. In
such
cases , cash can help save a human
being
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life. Not only
this
donating
money
to schools and
hospitals
can become a boon for society as they will be upgraded with
modern
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technology of
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world. To exemplify, famous actor "Salman Khan" had donated
Money
for the construction of
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hospital in Mumbai which now has become India's topmost cancer hospital to save
people
's lives.
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can be a blessing for those who are not so wealthy and cannot afford costly health treatments.
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,
Though
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fiscal help can help citizens in
plethora
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of ways
such
as getting free health treatment,
construction
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of schools or
hospitals
, helping them physically by taking care of their daily needs and showing your presence makes more difference.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • philanthropy
  • grassroots
  • non-governmental organizations (NGOs)
  • altruism
  • donation
  • volunteer
  • sponsor
  • beneficiary
  • transparency
  • accountability
  • advocacy
  • impact
  • scalability
  • community development
  • fundraising
  • non-profit sector
  • humanitarian aid
  • social responsibility
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