Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions, like nurses, doctors, and teachers. Some people think it is fully justified, while others believe it is unfair. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Although
,
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apply
athletes
have much more high salaries
than other crucial professionals such
as nurses,doctors and teachers some people
think it is not fair. However
others disagree with the opinion which claims it is not justified. I think sportsmen's contracts have Add a comma
,However
salaries
more than they deserve.However
, it is not just about deserving it is also
connected with
supply-demand balance.
From my point of view, Change preposition
to
athletes
' earnings are extremely high despite their role in society. There are more important workers for humanity such
as doctors and nurses. They are defined as important because we need them. To clarify, without them, we would not find anyone to solve our health problems. As a result
of this
, our life length will experience drastic
decrease. Add an article
a drastic
On the contrary
, athletes
do not play key
role in our lives. Add an article
a key
Therefore
, fulfilling salaries
must be given to these types of workers due to
encourage
them. Change the verb form
encouraging
Otherwise
, people
willing to be athletes
instead
of being doctors. Then
society probably will have to struggle with a lack of qualified people
.
On the other hand
, I can not say it is fully unfair because there is a huge correlation between salaries
and the supply-demand balance. In other words
, If people
spend a sea of money
on a sector people
who work in the sector earn lots of money
.Because if bosses earn a lot they can give a lot to their workers as a salary.In the sports sector
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,sector
people
are willing to spend their money
on some fan products such
as shirts and caps so employers earn a lot. As a result
of this
sportsmen and sportswomen want more money
because without them the owner of the team might not earns
.
In conclusion, despite the fact that some professionals have much more crucial things to do sportsmen earn higher Change the verb form
earn
salaries
. Consequently
some Add a comma
,Consequently
people
claim that their earnings are not morally acceptable. In my opinion
it is not completely wrong but if we did not give enough importance to qualified Add a comma
,opinion
people
we would face with
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apply
expert
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an expert
the expert
shortage
in some sectors. Balance must be set.Fix the agreement mistake
shortages
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