The bar chart below shows the percentage participation of men in senior development in three companies between 1980 and the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and report in the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The given bar chart presents the percentage of men participating in senior development in the chosen companies from 1980 to 2010. From

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perspective, Apple had the most share in the first 15

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, IBM surged to be on top for the next 15

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got the least compared to the others in 1980 with only 1%. In 1990, they had a significant increase to approximately 12% of participation. 2010 saw the most dramatic rise for IBM, twice as high as in 2000 with 62%. As

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Microsoft, they had about 8% in 1980. The number grows gradually

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the next 20

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. 2010 shows a remarkable development

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they reach 55% of men’s participation in senior development.

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though the mentioned companies have positive trends each year,

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Apple shows a fluctuation over the course of 30

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. They started with 14% in 1980

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and somehow decreased 2% in 1990. They have

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rise in 1995 and down in 2000. Just like the other companies, in 2010 the percentage grew to 25%.