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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to three London Museums between 2007 and 2012. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar chart gives us information about the number of London Museums’
visitors
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 between 2007 to 2012.
Overall
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, in 2007 the Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 came on top, followed by British
Museum
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 and National Gallery respectively.
However
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, the National Gallery surged past the others in 2012. In 2007, The Victoria and Albert
Museum
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 had approximately 14
million
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 people coming, which remained constant for the following year. Surprisingly, the number fell to 9
million
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 in just one year
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 and eventually reached its lowest point of 7
million
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 in 2010. The tourist growth gradually increased
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 in 2012, 10
million
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visitors
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 came. The situation is quite similar to British
Museum
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. The annual
visitors
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 fell twofold in 2008, with just above 5
million
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. For the following years, they saw a significant upward trend. By the end of 2012, the number of people paying a visit to the
Museum
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 had risen from 7
million
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 in 2010 to 12
million
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.
By contrast
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, National Gallery never experienced a decrease. They started with 6
million
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visitors
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 in 2007
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 and kept growing over the course of the next five years. They succeeded in attracting more people, they had a 4
million
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 increase from 2008 to 2011. By the end of the period years, they reached 16
million
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 annual
visitors
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, museum, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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