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Many believe that modern technology has brought people together, but others say that it has driven us apart. Discuss both viewpoints and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

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Recent developments in
technology
 have significant effects on societies. Some people believe
this
 would bring individuals together
while
 others think the opposite. In my opinion, I agree with both views because it is true that
technology
 set us apart but at the same
time
 made us closer than ever.
This
 essay will discuss both views. From the first view, users have become more involved in each other's life.
For
example
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 social media applications
such
 as Snapchat and Instagram make it convenient to text your friends and family.
Also
, there are special features that enable one to see recent places visited on a map.
In addition
 to pictures and videos inserted.
Moreover
, Face
Time
 application enables a conversation with your loved ones by only one click away. As for the second view, others think
technology
 makes people spend most of their
time
 alone.
This
 might be because a person gets intrigued by phones and spends a lot of
time
 on them. Especially young generations and children that tend to spend more
time
 on their mobile phones and playing video games.
Consequently
, family members do not spend enough
time
 together.
To sum up
,
technology
 has the advantage of bringing people together easily.
However
, family members do not spend much
time
 together because of it. I think it is crucial to utilize
technology
 in a useful way that does not interfere with social interactions in our daily life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • connectivity
  • communicate
  • social media
  • virtual meetings
  • global community
  • isolation
  • distract
  • face-to-face interaction
  • personal connections
  • dependency
  • technology addiction
  • digital divide
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