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Write a letter to your manager for a 3-day leave to attend a training course. In your letter -what is the course about -how this course will be helpful to your work -suggest how your work could be covered while you are away

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter because I have come to know through a reliable source that a time management skill workshop is going to be held next week in Lahore. I request you please accept my three days leave
application
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 for the
above mentioned
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 event.
In addition
, I am convinced that if I attend the programme it will be helpful in my job expertise. I
also
 think that courses
likewise
 should be introduced to by companies for the employees to enhance their skills. If employees are competent in their field, they will be more beneficial to their organizations.
Furthermore
, I assure you that after the training you will feel a huge difference in my performance. I hope you will never let me down and consider the application. I shall be very thankful to you for allowing me for the described course. Best regards. Yours Sincerely, Kunwar.
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Task Achievement
Consider providing a detailed explanation of how the training will directly impact your work and responsibilities. Specific examples can strengthen your request.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter can be slightly improved by organizing paragraphs more logically, following the order of bullet points in the task prompt more closely.
Task Achievement
The letter maintains a formal and polite tone which is suitable for a request to a manager.
Coherence and Cohesion
Clear opening and closing with appropriate greetings, making the letter well-structured.
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