If an individual acts in an anti-social way, such as committing the crime, who is to be blamed: society or the individual? What are the causes behind such behavior? Who should be responsible for this?

Presently, every
society
is
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on how to reduce
crime
commitments in their nations,
however
, it won’t eliminate
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the
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society
completely.In
fact
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society
can be blamed more than individuals.
society
are
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the blame for
an
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individuals who do an anti-social act. In the following paragraphs. I will explain the reasons and the people who are responsible for the mentioned problem. One of the main
reason
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of
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why
individual
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an individual
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has
tendency
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a tendency
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for
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a
crime
commitment
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is the lack of
education
. Parents are always responsible for putting their children in the school. So they could mingle around with the other children and their emotions and activities will be under
supervision
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of the
schools
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school's
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authorities. Negligence of the child’s
education
has detrimental effects not only
for
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the individuals but
also
for
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the
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society
as a whole.
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, In Iran, the majority of criminals who have
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to commit a
crime
, have not
complete
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their
education
properly. The next reason for the current problem is
the
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dire
poverty
.
Poverty
has
a
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capability for making people
to
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commit a
crime
.
poverty
has to be taken over by the government and they are responsible for eradicating
poverty
in one’s
society
.
For instance
,In Iran the majority of the criminals who commit a
crime
such
as pickpocketing or mugging are poor. To address the issue government must control
the
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inflation which
cause
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people to be poor. In conclusion,
education
is worth taking into consideration by the parents and dire
poverty
must be controlled by the government to reduce the number of anti-social activities in a
society
.
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