Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals think competition might be encouraged in
children
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others
children
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to be cooperative Change the verb form
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are
more likely to become useful adults. In the following Correct word choice
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view
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.
On the one hand, a sense of competition makes Correct pronoun usage
them
children
to
get tasks done in Change the verb form
apply
much
quicker way. Add an article
a much
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errors
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it is much easier for Add a comma
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children
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the problem and the make task done instantly. Change preposition
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For example
, those children
who have a competitive exam are very likely to get a better score in comparison to those who are not participate
in the exam of school Change the verb form
are not participating
such
as those pupils who are homeschooling
. In my Wrong verb form
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opinion
I do not think that encouraging students to be more competitive is Add a comma
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a good idea and it is because in
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some students might be very sensitive. Add a comma
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On the other hand
, some individuals argue that children
might be more cooperative rather than competitive. Because it will help them not only how to solve an obstacle in a
group work, but Remove the article
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also
the thrill of the challenge and sense of accomplishment make them feel better. For example
, those children
who are cooperating on a school project such
as creating a presentation are very likely to enjoy their work. In my opinion
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this
is best
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the best
of
doing Change preposition
to
such
cases. it is because human
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humans
Hence
people who are working on the same project are very productive and it makes them mature.
In conclusion, some people believe that competition makes the best out of children
and they are able to do their tasks in much
quicker way. Add an article
a much
However
, some individuals argue that being cooperative is much more productive that
being competitive and they become more useful adults.Correct word choice
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