Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals think competition might be encouraged in

children

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while

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believe that

children

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to be cooperative

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and are

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more likely to become useful adults. In the following

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I will discuss both

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. On the one hand, a sense of competition makes

children

to

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get tasks done in

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quicker way.

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is going to help to spot their mistakes through

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and

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it is much easier for

children

to tackle

on

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the problem and the make task done instantly.

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, those

children

who have a competitive exam are very likely to get a better score in comparison to those who

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in the exam of school

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as those pupils who are

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I do not think that encouraging students to be more competitive is

such

a good idea and it is because

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some students might be very sensitive.

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will lead to demotivated students to do more in

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.

On the other hand

, some individuals argue that

children

might be more cooperative rather than competitive. Because it will help them not only how to solve an obstacle in

a

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group work, but

also

the thrill of the challenge and sense of accomplishment make them feel better.

For example

, those

children

who are cooperating on a school project

such

as creating a presentation are very likely to enjoy their work. In my

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is

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approach

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doing

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cases. it is because

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are interconnected and sociable species.

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people who are working on the same project are very productive and it makes them mature. In conclusion, some people believe that competition makes the best out of

children

and they are able to do their tasks in

much

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a much

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quicker way.

However

, some individuals argue that being cooperative is much more productive

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being competitive and they become more useful adults.