Nowadays, people can live and work anywhere they want because of the development of communication technology and transport. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, through improved communication
technology
and transport, people can live and
work
anywhere they want. In my opinion, I believe that it is true because it might bring more advantages than its disadvantages.
Work
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from home or
work
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from anywhere is
favorable
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among the younger
,
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because
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ones because
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not only
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a better
work life
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balance for workers but
also
increasing
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local’s
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the local’s
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economy where they lived.
For instance
, I am Singaporean and have a current job in Singapore but I live in Bali because the living cost is cheaper than in Singapore.
Moreover
, I enjoy living in Bali and spend a lot of money on local because I receive more wages in Singapore than in Indonesia.
Hence
, it will
also
bring
benefit
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and new opportunities for developing countries.
On the other hand
,
technology
was not
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enough in some countries or some areas. That condition made people hard to get
a
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reliable communication.
For example
, if we
are
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live in Papua, where that area is not covered by
4
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G internet connection,
therefore
any video conference will be delayed.
Moreover
, some areas had not
a
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public transportation and were difficult to be lived
.
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Thus
, not all area was good for
worker
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a worker
the worker
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who depend a lot on certain
technology
and transport.
To conclude
,
although
some areas had limited
technology
and transportation, living and working anywhere will push local communities to improve their economy and attract more
tourist
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tourists
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who
willing
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to
working
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from anywhere. Meanwhile, the workers have
a
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freedom to choose the place where they
interested
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in
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and enjoy their lives.
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