Media focusses on problems rather than development. To what extent do you agree?

Nowadays, the topic of many citizens are

organized

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to travel to rural

area

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, which has been a prevalent topic. And there are many

people

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argue

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who argue

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that

,

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the

affect

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effect

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of

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on

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local individuals and the environment are benefits or drawbacks. In my perspective,

although

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this

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kind of activity has

certain

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degree of weaknesses, the profits

are outweigh

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the drawbacks. It has been

suggest

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suggesting

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that the

people

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who come from endemic

area

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areas

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will affect the natural environment and

producing

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pollution. For

instant

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, there are many visitors through rubbish

in

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apply

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anywhere and painting on buildings which is

place

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a place

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of interest

due to

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the historical constructions

are

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damaged. After that, the street and famous scenery will probably become

certain

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crowded, when a large

amount

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number

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of individuals enter

to

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apply

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remote

places

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.

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, the

items

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price

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prices

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will

increase

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sharply

due to

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many visitors

come

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coming

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to rural

places

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, and the high price of goods will affect local

people

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severe

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severely

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.

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, the benefits of tours visiting remote

area

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areas

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are very obvious.

This

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situation can help rural

places

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to develop

market

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economy and to promote the average standard of consumption, which is profit for state government and

economy

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economic

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improvement.

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,

this

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phenomenon can

increase

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the focus of the local place of interest and make the

places

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become hot and popular,

hence

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get

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getting

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huge

profit

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profits

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from

tickets

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consumption,

souvenirs

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consumption and so on. A typical example is that

,

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local citizens can use the reputation of famous

places

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to

sale

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goods to get big profit

with

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at

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low cost.

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, local

people

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can claim everyone should try

them

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their

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best to protect the natural environments and artificial buildings on the internet

,

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when many visitors play in these

places

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. It is a useful method to protect the natural scenery. In conclusion, I believe the positive effects of

people

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visiting rural

places

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is

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apply

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outweigh the drawbacks, it not only

improve

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improves

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the

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economy developing but

also

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protect

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protects

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natural landscapes

on

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to

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certain

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a certain

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degree. The line chart compares the percentage

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people

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of people

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who are 65

years

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old or more in

Japan

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,

Swden

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Sweden

and the

USA

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over a period of 100

years

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.

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the ratio of elderly

people

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increase

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increases

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in every

countries

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country

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over the period shown.

Japan

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is expected to see the most dramatic rise in its elderly population. In 1940, 9% of Americans were over 65

years

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old, which is higher than

other

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the other

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two countries. Elder

people

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continuously went up in the next

years

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from the

USA

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and Sweden and reached around 15% in 1990.

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,

Japan

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’s proportion

account

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for 3% and was the lowest amount at that time. The number of

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Japan

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Japanese

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began to rise constantly between 1990 and 2010. Between 2030 to 2040, a sharp

increase

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in the percentage of

the

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apply

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older in

Japan

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is expected to see, jumping around 15% to 28% by 2040.

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, the ratio of elderly citizens in the

Swden

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Sweden

and the

USA

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rise slightly in that time. By 2040, the figure for Sweden and the

USA

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would be 25% and 23% respectively, which are slightly lower than that of

Japan

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.