Some people think that advertising on TV is useless and others disagree.Discuss these views and give your own opinion.

It is widely argued that television
ads
are not crucial for our life,
while
others believe that advertisements can affect
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us well
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.In my view,marketing ,TVs and
also
humanity can take numerous benefits from advertising.
This
essay will discuss
firstly
effectless
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the effectless
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side of
TV
ads
,
secondly
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and secondly
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upsides
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the upsides
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about
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this
trend. On the one hand,the vast majority of people tend to purchase what they really want.By
this
I mean,watching
ads
and buying something through them are beyond
intend
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.
Thus
they can not see that advertisements will become useful way ,
instead
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,instead
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it
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they
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would be pointless concepts or just for
joys
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joy
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.
Moreover
,some malls are afraid of bringing new
production
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products
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which
are
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is
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shown
through
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on
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TV
or radio.Since nowadays unbelief about advert promises and importance in real life are emerging in individuals'
mind
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minds
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.
For example
,a number of  companies
where
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that
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make beverages show fascinating
appearences
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appearances
appearance
and promise a healthy production but after buying,consumers can recognise that they are not the same as
ads
.Through
this
,people are losing both their money and belief.
On the other hand
,I,
however
,support the second opinion,namely
that is
about
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the benefitial
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benefitial
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beneficial
ways of adverts.When people can not choose up-to-date and suitable clothes or want to find out popular things
accross
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across
the globe,
TV
ads
are by far the
most handy
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handiest
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helper because some things can aid their
hesistation
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hesitation
.Thanks to a number of
productions
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production
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ads
on
TV
,it is planned menus of needs in advance,
consumers
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and consumers
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find anything
easilyand
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easily and
also
purchase them in
market's
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the market's
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sections.Take hosts as an example.If hosts have no time to choose items for guests
whose
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who
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are in a hurry,just go and purchase from
supermarket
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the supermarket
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what
it
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apply
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is watched
by
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on
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TV
..
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.
...
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As a result
,they manage to achieve  time and finance
managements
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management
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. In conclusion,though there are some
drawbackssuch
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drawbacks such
draw backs such
as
advertisements
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advertisement
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types that provide unbelief and can not do their own promises,some
TV
ads
can emerge saving time and money.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • source of entertainment
  • relaxation
  • means of information
  • education
  • cultural awareness
  • negative influence
  • addiction
  • moderation
  • TV programs
  • documentaries
  • news
  • reality shows
  • soap operas
  • commercials
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