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The given diagram illustrates different stages involved in the process of making 5 tea types from tea leaves.

The given diagram illustrates different stages involved in the process of making 5 tea types from tea leaves.
The given diagram illustrates
different
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the different
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 stages involved in the
process
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 of making 5
tea
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 types from
tea
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 leaves.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 there are about three or five main periods in
this
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process
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 depending on
particular
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the particular
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tea
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, commencing from plucking
leaf
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 growth and finishing with 5 types of
tea
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,
namedly
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namely
named
 White
Tea
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, Green
Tea
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, Oolong
Tea
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, Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 and Small
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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. Looking first at the diagram, both of these types of
tea
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also
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 experience three periods, consisting of plucking, withering and oven drying.
While
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 the
process
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 of making White
Tea
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 is the simplest
process
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 because
this
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process
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 includes three mentioned periods, the leaves which are used for making Green
Tea
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 must be steamed and rolled before oven drying. About the remaining, Oolong
Tea
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 has to experience more steps than White
Tea
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, which
are
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is
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 the period of rolling and slight fermentation after withering.
In addition
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,
although
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 Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 and Small
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 are
also
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 experiencing the period of full fermentation, Large
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 must be rolled
while
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 Small
Leaf
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 Black
Tea
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 must be crushed before fermentation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, tea, leaf with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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