The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The charts below give information about the way in which water was used in different countries in 2000. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
The graphs show how much
water
was used in different countries and sectors in 2000.
Overall
,
according to
the pie graph, the major part of world
water
use is occupied by agriculture.
Moreover
, we can see from the bar graph that there is a difference in
water
consumption between developing and developed nations. Regarding world
water
usage, agriculture accounted for 70%,
while
domestic and industry usage consisted of 8% and 22% respectively. When it comes to consumption between the selected four states, it is noticeable that developing countries (China and India), consumed the major part of
water
(69% and 92% each) in agriculture.
On the other hand
, developed states (Canada and New Zealand) spent less in the same sector. In fact, Canada's agricultural use of
water
is roughly less than 10%. Another feature is that New Zealand's domestic sector usage was by far the highest, accounting for slightly less than half: an enormous ratio compared to the other nations.
Finally
, China's industrial
water
consumption represented 80%, not a surprising number given that China is famous to be the Industry of the world.
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