The pie charts below Show the most common advantages and disadvantages of Bowen islands, according to a surrey of visitors.

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and advantages of Bowen Islands,

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tourists.

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of tourists high cost of

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entertainment making up 25% survey of visitors.

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, two pie of disadvantages which are called food quality and weather make up 10% and 15% respectively.

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for 35% and 12% of all.

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