The continued rise in the world’s population is the greatest problem faced by humanity at the present time. What are the causes of this continued rise? Do you agree that it is the greatest problem faced by humanity?

The increasing number of people on the planet is the greatest threat to mankind's existence right now. In

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essay, I will explore the causes of

this

upward trend and illustrate why I disagree with

this

statement. The

amount

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of citizens

are

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mainly going up in developing countries and there are a few reasons for

this

.

Firstly

, there is

lack

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of knowledge about contraception use, which leads to regular unprotected intercourse and eventually more offspring.

Secondly

,

poverty

play

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a major role in the desire to have more kids, as youngsters will help the family unit survive; by working.

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, a family consisting of four members will bring in less income, as compared to families with more members which will bring in more money

hence

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the impact of

poverty

.

Although

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child labour is an unfortunate development

due to

increasing

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individuals

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number of individuals

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, I believe that

this

is not the biggest problem for humanity. The main concern would be the lack of resources that can be used with more mouths to feed;

however

, I am convinced that the main issue is

allocation

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the allocation

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of resources rather than availability.

For instance

, patients are suffering from obesity in

first world

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countries

whereas

malnutrition is affecting under-developed nations.

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illustrates that excess goods can be given to

poverty affected

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areas, but it is being consumed

instead

. In conclusion, the rising trend in the

amount

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number

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of humans on the planet is not a cause for concern because the environment can sustain us; but, there is

improper

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the improper

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distribution of useful material. Safe sex

practice

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can reduce the

ever rising

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people

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number of people

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in

poverty

and by implementing a robust aid program, having children will be a want and not a need for survival.