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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People are responsible for their happiness. Others feel happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your opinion? You should write at least 250 words.

You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. People are responsible for their happiness. Others feel happiness depends on other factors in their life. Discuss both views and give your opinion? You should write at least 250 words.
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It has been a controversial and debatable topic over the years whether
happiness
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 and joy are part of
people
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's responsibility or it depends on their lives situations and conditions. In
this
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 essay, I will try to discuss those different perspectives and give my opinion on
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 a
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. Some
people
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 believe that everyone is responsible for his
happiness
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. They always think that joy is a kind of feeling coming from your deep soul. For them, no
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 what your situation is and no
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 what you have accomplished in
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 life, you need to be happy.
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, if you walk through an old and poor neighbourhood, you will still see
people
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 laughing and enjoying their time.
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,
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 is not a thing you only can see; even recent studies have approved
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 delegation. One study had conducted in South Africa _where the level of education and wealth is low_ and the
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 indicator was high.
people
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 tend to enjoy little of everything. they jump for joy if they learn a new word or have a clean glass of water.
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, some
people
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 tend to believe that
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 is a conditional
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. they tie up
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 feeling with accomplishment or achievement. Those
people
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 usually suffer from depression and mental issues.
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, they have low self-esteem and they need to change their thinking and beliefs about
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.
This
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 feeling and
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 attitude have encouraged competitive sociality. Studies in the USA shows a high level of depression among teenager because they have to achieve high score in math and science.
To sum up
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, I believe that
happiness
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 should not depend on other life factors
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 as success or achievement. and we should raise our kids to appreciate every single moment in their life.
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