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10.B.Some people think restoration of the old building takes huge amount of the government expenditure. It would be more beneficial to use this money for the development of new roads and buildings. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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nowadays, some argue that
reconstruction
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the reconstruction
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 of vintage
buildings
 involves substantial finances from national funds. it definitely helps to invest that money in the improvement of new roads and
buildings
. I agree with
this
 statement and
this
 essay will elaborate more arguments related to
this
. Foremost among
advantages
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the advantages
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 of
construction
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the construction
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 of brand new
buildings
 is
possibility
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the possibility
a possibility
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 to make it higher and to
provides
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provide
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 more
hame
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home
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 places for
people
. a city with more
habitants
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habitats
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 and
workforce
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a workforce
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, it develops easier. in ,addition new
buildings
 are done with modern technology and high-quality materials which makes them more resistant in years. a solid house provides a higher life quality and psychical comfort for
people
.
for example
 in
Bucharrest
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Bucharest
 Romania, many old estates were demolished and replaced with new real estates where many young families moved.
overall
,
this
 seems to be a positive for national infrastructure. roads should be a safer place but as it can be observed many old routes put under risks
people
 s life. raising awareness regarding
importance
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the importance
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 of new and safe streets should be a priority for national institutions rather than restaurants of old
buildings
.
as a result
, the national economy
also
 will be released because in conclusion , there are numerous reasons why
government
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the government
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 should invest national finances .in the construction of new
buildings
 or roads which are related
with
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to
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 opportunity for many
people
 to develop his
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