The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.

The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004.
The graph illustrates information about the value of
bananas
in four regions between 1994 and 2004.
To begin
with, the rate of
bananas
is in US dollars per kilogram. It can be seen that in the year, 1996 the
cost
of
bananas
in
Japan
and France was the highest (USD $2 per kilogram) as compared to
Germany
and
USA
being the lowest. In 1997, the
cost
of
bananas
in
Germany
decreased from USD $1.5 per kg to about 1.20
whereas
it remained the same in the
USA
. In 1998, the value of the fruit in
Japan
raised to USD $ 3 per kilogram
in contrast
to other countries.
Germany
and
USA
are at $1.80 and $1.30 respectively. In 1999, there was a fall in the
cost
of
bananas
in all four countries. In 2000 the
cost
of
bananas
increased in
Japan
and France significantly. In 2004, the value was highest for
Japan
followed by France,
Germany
and
USA
. It can be concluded that
bananas
in
Japan
are the most expensive in relation to other states.
USA
being the cheapest.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, cost, japan, germany, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • price fluctuation
  • steady increase/decrease
  • significant rise/drop
  • trend
  • noticeable
  • comparison
  • contrast
  • highest
  • lowest
  • throughout the period
  • stable
  • volatile
  • potential reasons
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