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Some feel that animal testing is cruel while others feel it is necessity. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

#feel #necessity
There is a split opinion where some believe conducting
tests
 on
animals
 is cruelty and some believe it is mandatory.
However
, both have their own pros and cons.
Therefore
i
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 will discuss both viewpoints and give my opinion Examining the primary point, thinkers who believe animal testing is cruel would put forward is
animals
 cannot speak and
they
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cannot express their feelings when
tests
 are being conducted on them. For ,instance
monkeys
, for
the
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ages scientists have been conducting
tests
 on
monkeys
 as their DNA matches with
humans
, whether it be any medical
tests
 or sending them to
space
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 very first time. The cure for polio back in 1990 was tested on
monkeys
 first and because of so back to back failures around 60 to 70
monkeys
 died till the cure was found.
Additionally
 there
also
 no strict laws being imposed for people who use
animals
 to
conduct
tests
. In fact, in some countries governments themselves allow the use of
animals
 for
tests
for example
 when a chimpanzee was sent by a very popular
space
 laboratory to
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space
 to
conduct
 a test and to check if
chimpanzee
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 can survive a rocket ride to the
space
 and on top of that no measures were taken to bring the chimpanzee back.
On the contrary
 latter view, some believe animal
tests
 are necessary before introducing the results or start giving cures
of
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 medicines to
the
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humans
. No human would sacrifice their life to
conduct
 a test on them,
,
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additionally
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 strong laws are
also
 imposed on conducting
tests
 on
humans
, where someone could be hanged to death or they could be jailed for life if they
conduct
tests
 on
human
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.
Moreover
,
humans
 have a larger purpose to serve
to
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the
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society
then
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animals
. For
an
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instance if people keep doing
tests
 on
human
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humans
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 and when they fail a person dies it could have served more than 1 purpose to
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society.
To conclude
 and to give my opinion, I would say that
tests
 being conducted on
animals
 first is a justified and more ideal approach,
,
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however
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 there should
also
 be some restrictions on
use
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 of
animals
 by only some institutes and research departments. In a big picture sometimes
this
 type of test on
animals
 could save the human race.
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