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What do you think about the educational development in our society?

#development #society
The bar chart gives information about 5 different types
export
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 earnings when the table show percentage change in values in 2015 and 2016.
It is clear that
 petroleum
products
 and engineered goods were exported more than other categories in
the
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both years and the highest percentage increase was experienced in textiles from the information
of
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table
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the table
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 from 2015 to 2016. From 2015 to 2016, the figure for petroleum
products
 grew by nearly 2
billion
 dollars compared to about
by
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5
billion
 for both engineered goods and textiles. There is a slight decrease in gems and jewellery from roughly 42
billion
 dollars to just over 40
billion
 dollars.
However
, the figure for agricultural
products
 remained stable in 2015 and 2016.
The
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4 out
five
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 earrings increased in
values
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value
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, category of
geems
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gems
games
 and
jewelry
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 was
exception
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 over the period shown .Just over 15 % growth was had in
cost
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 of textiles in comparison with 8,5 % engineered goods
3
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and 3
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% petroleum
products
.
Also
,
value
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the value
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 of agricultural
products
 rose by nearly 1 % but
geem
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gem
 and
jewelry
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jewellery
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 in values fell
to
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by
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 5% in
the
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both years.
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