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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Many people say that
children
 should learn a new
language
 at primary
school
.
However
, others think that it is ok if they start to learn a foreign
language
 at secondary
school
. In
this
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 the benefits and the drawbacks of learning a new
language
 from a low age will be discussed. There are some advantages for
children
 to learn a foreign
language
 from a low age. One of the most important benefits is that the brains of
children
 are not mature and they have
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 ability to learn faster than
children
 who are older.
For example
, when a child is 7 years old,
he\she
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she
 can learn new
vocabularies
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, or grammar faster with little practice.
However
, a child
with
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at
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 16 years old should make more effort to learn the same vocabulary, or grammar
that is
 taught to that 7 years old child. The other benefit is that
,
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 from primary
school
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 they learn the fundamentals of
language
 like grammar,
then
 in secondary and university they might be a master at that
language
, and they can spend their time
to learn
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 other skills like,
softwares
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software
, sports or other things
instead
 of learning a
language
.
On the other hand
, learning a new
language
 from early
ages
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age
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 might have drawbacks. Some parents might put pressure on their
children
 to learn a new
language
. That pressure in the long term may have some bad effects, and make them run away to learn a new
language
. So, parents should be careful how they treat their
children
 because
children
 are very vulnerable. In conclusion,
Although
 some individuals think that it is better for
children
 to learn a second
language
 from primary
school
, others say there is no difference to learn a second
language
 from secondary
school
. I believe that the advantages of learning from an early age outweigh the disadvantages.
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  • pronunciation
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  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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