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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

#experts #children #language #school #outweigh
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Many people say that
children
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 should learn a new
language
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 at primary
school
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.
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, others think that it is ok if they start to learn a foreign
language
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 at secondary
school
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. In
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 the benefits and the drawbacks of learning a new
language
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 from a low age will be discussed. There are some advantages for
children
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 to learn a foreign
language
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 from a low age. One of the most important benefits is that the brains of
children
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 are not mature and they have
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 ability to learn faster than
children
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 who are older.
For example
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, when a child is 7 years old,
he\she
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she
 can learn new
vocabularies
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, or grammar faster with little practice.
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, a child
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 16 years old should make more effort to learn the same vocabulary, or grammar
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 taught to that 7 years old child. The other benefit is that
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 from primary
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school
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 they learn the fundamentals of
language
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 like grammar,
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 in secondary and university they might be a master at that
language
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, and they can spend their time
to learn
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 other skills like,
softwares
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software
, sports or other things
instead
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 of learning a
language
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.
On the other hand
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, learning a new
language
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 from early
ages
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 might have drawbacks. Some parents might put pressure on their
children
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 to learn a new
language
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. That pressure in the long term may have some bad effects, and make them run away to learn a new
language
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. So, parents should be careful how they treat their
children
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 because
children
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 are very vulnerable. In conclusion,
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 some individuals think that it is better for
children
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 to learn a second
language
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 from primary
school
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, others say there is no difference to learn a second
language
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 from secondary
school
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. I believe that the advantages of learning from an early age outweigh the disadvantages.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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  • cultural awareness
  • global society
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