Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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there are benefits in teaching

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to cooperate, we should be careful not to raise

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who can barely think and act for themselves. And

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I favour encouraging

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to be competitive, I am fully aware that it is not with its own drawbacks. In

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essay, I will explore both perspectives and their respective advantages and disadvantages, and give my opinion. One of the benefits of teaching

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to cooperate rather than compete is that they become very considerate, polite, and agreeable adults which are very important traits to have a more malleable

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. Agreeable adults are easy to control which can greatly reduce protests or any kind of revolt against authorities. The downside to

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approach is that it breeds a

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that values politeness over truth.

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, the ongoing phenomenon called "political correctness", in which individuals would rather say and do what they perceive to be popular and acceptable even though it might not be the truth.

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, it has been proven by many studies that agreeable people do not make good innovators and entrepreneurs for the very reason that to be an innovator, you have to be somewhat disruptive.

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, when

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are encouraged to be more competitive, they tend to develop into adults who have their own minds rather than blindly following the collective, these individuals tend to challenge the status quo to find better solutions, and

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is why they make very good entrepreneurs, innovators and change-makers in the political sphere. The disadvantage of these individuals is that they tend to lack empathy for the less privileged in

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. In conclusion, as a

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, we should strike a balance between raising

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to be cooperative and competitive, favoring one over the other is not as beneficial to

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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