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The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.

The table below shows the number of vehicles registered in Australia in 2010, 2012 and 2014.
The table illustrates the percentage of
vehicles
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 has been sold in Australia during the year
of
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apply
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2010, 2012 and 2014.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the type number of
vehicles
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 has
been
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increased in all
in
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of
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 2012 and 2014. The passenger
vehicles
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stands
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stand
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 at the highest numbers with 11,000,000 followed by commercial
vehicles
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 with 2,300,000.
Whereas
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 the opposite
it
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is true with other
vehicles
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. In terms of the heavy
trucks
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,trucks
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 it is found with less percentage change with 10.2% and 17.4% for commercial
vehicles
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. An exceptional case is found in light trucks with 23.5%. In summary, the highest change in registration was seen in Motorcycles with 30.7%

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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