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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent decades,
animals
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purpose
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 in order to discover new medicines and test the safety of other goods. Some individuals believe that these
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 should be prohibited because it is unethical and can cause harm to creatures,
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 others think it can be beneficial for
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. In my opinion,
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trials
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animals
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 can help to improve
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as well as
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animals
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. On the one hand, some
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 believe the
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animals
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 it immoral and should stop. They believe
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are feel
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as
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humans
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 , they can struggle with pain
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 the
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, thanks to
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 in technology , scientists can do their medical
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 using simulations program or
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humans
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indicate do not need to use
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experiments
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animals
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 are necessary to enhance the
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 of
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 and
animals
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. At
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the humans
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humans
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 level,
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a
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 the medications are safe before
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, the majority of our medicines
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 in rats in order to make sure there are no serious side effects of these medicines, which
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overall
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health
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animals
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some
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animals
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 are extinct result of global warming and climate change,
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scientists these days work in order to find
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new drugs to help
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trials
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 will contribute to
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animals
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 from risk extinction. In conclusion,
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in
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animals
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humans
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animals
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 and should not banned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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