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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent decades,
animals
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 utilized for
experiment
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purpose
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 in order to discover new medicines and test the safety of other goods. Some individuals believe that these
experiments
 should be prohibited because it is unethical and can cause harm to creatures,
whereas
 others think it can be beneficial for
humans
. In my opinion,
the
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trials
in
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animals
 should
do
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not
banned
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 because
it
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 can help to improve
people
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health
as well as
animals
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animals'
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. On the one hand, some
people
 believe the
experiments
 in
animals
 it immoral and should stop. They believe
animals
are feel
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as
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like
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humans
 , they can struggle with pain
while
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 the
experiments
.
Furthermore
, thanks to
advancemnts
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advances
 in technology , scientists can do their medical
researches
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 using simulations program or
humans
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 cells, which
this
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indicate do not need to use
animals
 for
trials
.
On the other hand
, I believe
the
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experiments
in
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animals
 are necessary to enhance the
overall
health
 of
humans
 and
animals
. At
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the humans
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humans
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 level,
trials
a
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of
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 new drugs in
animals
 can help
the
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scientists to
ensuring
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 the medications are safe before
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in
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to
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people
.
For example
, the majority of our medicines
are tests
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are tested
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 in rats in order to make sure there are no serious side effects of these medicines, which
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will
boosts
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overall
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health
 of
people
. At
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the animals
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animals
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animal
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 level,
the
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some
of
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animals
 are extinct result of global warming and climate change,
the
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scientists these days work in order to find
a
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new drugs to help
animals
to
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deal with
rising
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of
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temperature of
earth
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,
which
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this
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trials
 will contribute to
protect
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animals
 from risk extinction. In conclusion,
in
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from
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 my perspective
experiments
in
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on
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animals
 can
bring
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 positive impacts
of
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on
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humans
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human
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 and
animals
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animal
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health
 and should not banned.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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