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What are the advantage and disadvantage of leaving your country to live or study abroad

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Migrating to another province for the reason of study or work has been increasing nowadays; Some people argue that by doing so, we can learn cross-cultural values, earn more and learn adaptability. Perhaps, it is hard to leave the homey where we were born and live across the ocean without family and friends. In my opinion, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. Primarily, in recent days, more people are leaving abroad for the purpose of higher study or work specifically in developed countries whose monetary value is more. Certainly, it gives them more weightage to their career
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 the earnings are much higher than in the homey.
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, USD has the highest money value all over the world so individuals from developing countries
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 as India would prefer to go to work in the USA since they can earn more money compared to their home province.
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, people get to know cross-cultural values and they can learn another language. Unequivocally, the Public who are leaning towards migration to another province
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 few hardships. They cannot be with their family and it is very difficult to travel often to their homey
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 various reasons. Adding to
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, it is hard to
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 to climatic changes and food habits which would be entirely different from the ones that they are used to since birth.
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, In India where I live summer
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 very hot and it even runs down to 40 degrees Celsius but in, Canada the winter
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 the coldest which would be running down to -13 degrees.
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, leaving the place where we were born gives us advantages which outweigh the disadvantages, even though there are a few hardships
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it does result in earning more and taking care of our family's monetary needs.
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task response
The essay demonstrates a good understanding of the task and presents a clear argument. However, make sure to address both the advantages and disadvantages in more detail.
coherence and cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion. However, the link between ideas within paragraphs could be improved for better coherence.

Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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