A friend of yours is thinking about applying for the same course that you did at university. He has adked for your advice about studying this subject. Write a letter to your friend. give details of the course you took explain why you recomment this university. give some advice about how to apply.

Dear John, I hope
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letter finds you in good health. I am glad you are planning to pursue your graduation from Jaypee
university
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. I am aware you always intended to study computer science, just like I did. I am excited that you will be coming to Delhi for
this
course. I have a room vacant in my
appartment
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apartment
and we will be roommates again. Let me give you a brief about
this
course and how to apply for it. Well,
this
course is in trend and has a lot of job opportunities for the future. You will be learning about
differnt
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different
programming languages, database designing, a little bit about
history
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of
computer
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and the power of cloud computing. I am lucky to get an admission
in
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this
university. All the professors are very knowledgeable and experts on the subject they teach. I'm sure you will have a great experience if you are able to find a place
in
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this
university. I would suggest you
to
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apply under
sports
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quota. I remember you
have
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played
a
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state level
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tournament. It will surely help you with the admission. I wish you good luck
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the future and hope to see you soon. Warm Wishes, Sameer
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  • thirdly
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  • therefore
  • however
  • although
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