The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.

The bar chart shows the number of times per week (in 1000s), over five weeks, that three computer packages were downloaded from the internet.
The bar chart illustrates the
number
of downloading three program packages; ActiveX, Java and Net each
week
during
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5 weeks.
Overall
, it can be seen that ActiveX and Net program packages were the most and less popular applications among users respectively.
Also
, the amount of downloading these three programs had almost
upward
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trend in the whole
period
. ActiveX
were
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downloaded about 70
times
in the first
week
,
then
,
this
number
increased to approximately 95 and 110
times
in the second and third weeks of
period
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.
However
, we see a slight decrease in the
number
of its downloading to about 90
times
in
the
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week
4 and
then
, we had a significant rise again to reach a peak of 125
times
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in the
last
week
. Java and Net were downloaded about 45 and 35times in the first
week
but the Java has become more popular among people and the
number
of its download witnessed a moderate rise until the end of the
period
to about 55, 60, 70 and 80 until the end of the
period
in each
week
respectively.
While
,
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the
number
of Net application downloading
had
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experienced a fall trend until the third
week
and
then
it gained
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popularity to 40 and 50
times
downloading in
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week
4 and 5 in sequence.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, week, period, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.

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