The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
The bar graph illustrates how much
time
and in what ways
Chinese
, American,
Turkish
, and Brazilian tourists spent their leisure
time
while
visiting Greece on a day in August 2019.
Overall
, the
Chinese
spent most of their
time
reading books,
while
the Brazilian liked chilling at the beach the most. American and
Turkish
visitors enjoyed their stay by balancing the three activities. Visiting places was the least popular activity for each nationality. Reading books was popular among all ethnicity, in
fact
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all of them spent more than 4
hours
on books on average. Appealing is that the
Chinese
used 8
hours
, which is the highest
time
spent on all the activities.
On the other hand
, we can see that sites seeing was unpopular. The
Chinese
spent only an hour, 3
hours
for the Americans and the
Turkish
, and 2 for the Brazilians.
Time
spent on the beach varied by nationality. The
Chinese
spent the least: only 3
hours
. When it comes to
Turkish
tourists they used 5
hours
of their daily
time
, an hour more than Americans. The nationality which liked laying on the beach the most was Brazilian spending 6
hours
on average.
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