A person's worth nowadays seems to be judged according to social status and material possessions. Old-fashioned values, such as honor, kindness and trust no longer seem important. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In our modern era,
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’s
values
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have significantly changed.
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some
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still follow traditional
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, I strongly believe
people
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’s judgments are based on each other’s money and wealth for two reasons. First of all, many of our
values
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are determined by the society that we are living in. These days in almost all countries around the
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, those who have high social status or big accounts in the banks usually receive more respect and service from others. In fact,
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manner is getting done very legally.
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, there is a huge difference between passengers of a plane who have business class tickets
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economic ones. The first one would enjoy a very comfortable seat all over his or her long trip
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while
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being offered many expensive drinks and meals.
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, those in economy parts should tolerate low back pain and neck pain
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squeezed spaces.
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, unconsciously,
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learn that
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worth is mostly dependent on wealth, and they could internalize
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value and judge others by that. Another reason is
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effects of social media. Everybody
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has an Instagram or a Facebook account and spends lots of time surfing the Internet. Most
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, especially young ones, believe what they see and hear on these platforms. In
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world
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, having more followers brings credit to individuals, and if they post something, thousands will like the post that might not have any valuable meaning.
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, almost any post from Kim Kardashian gets the attention of millions of her followers, which implies the influence of
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person in the virtual
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.
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,
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phenomenon could insidiously affect the young generations in the real
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and change their basic criteria for judging
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, giving more value to the rich and famous ones. The algorithm
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could gradually change the core
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of a society. In conclusion, not only does society but
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social media
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essential roles in changing
people
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’s
values
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. I strongly believe a person’s worth in our
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is determined by material
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and high social status.
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