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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billioin) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three catagories, from 1995-2002. Summarises the information by selection and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates the number of
minutes
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 from 1995 to 2002 that were called in the UK and they are divided into three groups.
According to
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 the given chart, the local phone
line
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 that was used in 1999 was the highest significance. On an opposite, the call
line
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 remained at the lowerest level in 1995. Phone call for the national and international-fixed
line
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 was similar in 2001 and 2002. Like the way of national and internal-fixed
lines
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, local-fixed
lines
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 were almost similar in 1998 and 1999.
Furthermore
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, the local phone
line
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 was used for around about 72
minutes
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 ( in billions )
while
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 the all calls
line
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 was 3
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 (billions). In the chart, any calls in 2002 were nearly 40
minutes
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 (in billions) higher than in 1995.
Therefore
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, any calls had been rising as an upward trend from 1995 to 2002.
On the other hand
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, the local
line
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 had been gradually going up and reached the highest level in 1999 and moderately fall until 2002.
In contrast
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, the community in the UK will have to use both all calls, national and international-fixed
lines
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 more than local-fixed
lines
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 in the future.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, line, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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