Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is said the states should allocate funds
on
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rail
lines
instead
of highways. I totally agree with
this
statement, because the
railways
are environmentally friendly,
can
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and can
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minimize
number
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the number
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of accidents
roads
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on roads
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. To being with, there are several reasons why I believe authorities should
funding
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the
railways
rather than
roads
.
Firstly
, if the governments do not make improvements in highways,
this
can discourage
people
to use their private vehicles , and
then
this
can make
people
prefer to use
railways
.
Therefore
,
this
step can
cutting
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the number of cars
in
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on
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our
roads
, which means
the
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global warming and climate change will mitigate.
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is because
the
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most Co2 emissions which
harmful
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are harmful
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to
environment
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the environment
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comes
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come
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from
fumes
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the fumes
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of cars.
Furthermore
,
invest
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money in
rail
networks can provide many job
opportunity
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opportunities
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and income for local
people
.
For example
, thousands of employees will work as
trains
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drivers,
waiters
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and waiters
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for commuters.
A
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a result,
this
invest
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can minimize the rate of poverty and crime in society.
Secondly
,
the
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most accidents
in
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on
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our
roads
result
of
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bad human errors namely, sudden
stop
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or turn left,
overspeed
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and overspeed
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, which means by
incentivize
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incentivising
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people
to utilize
rail
networks the number of accidents will decline.
This
is because
the
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most
of
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trains captains are
professional
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professionals
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and they received better training than those who drive cars.
Thus
,
rail
networks can help to protect
people
to get injuries or even death,
also
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and also
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then
reduce the pressure
in
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healthcare
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system. In conclusion, I strongly believe
the
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that
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lawmakers should invest money in
railways
rather than
roads
, because the
railways
are eco-friendly, and contribute to
drop
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a drop
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the
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in the
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percentage of incidents on our
roads
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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