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You have invited to your friend’s wedding, which will take place in another country next month. Write a letter to the couple and say that you cannot attend. Explain why you are unable to come. Invite them to visit you after the wedding. Describe some activities you can do together when they visit.

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Hey Sam, Hope you are doing well. I have two pieces of news for you. One is desirable and another is undesirable. I render you exciting news first. I got the
rereational
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recreational
 therapist
job
 which I was entering to get the
last
 couple of months. I am
overwhelming
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exhilaration
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and exhilaration
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 to start
this
job
 and my joining date
on
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 the 19th
July
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of July
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. I remembered
yours
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your
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weeding
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wedding
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 day is 21st July. I am apologising
you
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 that I can't able to attend the
weeding
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wedding
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.
Although
 I know
this
 is
special
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 day for you,
this
 is my
amibitous
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ambitious
job
 so I can't reject the
job
 offer.
Eventhough
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Even though
, I am
exhilarating
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 to invite you
India
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to India
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 in
Spetember
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September
. In
Spetember
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September
 I will get
somedays
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some days
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 off from
the
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apply
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work and I remembered you already had booked some days off from your work in September and October. The weather will be really nice in September. We will get a plethora of
excited
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 things to do
such
 as going to
beach
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the beach
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, hiking and mountain climbing in Goa. I hope you will look forward to it and contact me as soon as possible, so I can make
arrangment
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arrangement
arrangements
 promptly. With Lots of love, Tania.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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