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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. to what extent do you agree or disagre

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Nowdays
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, using
of
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social media has
becoming
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 more popular,
the
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and the
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 impression of
networks
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network
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 sites on our
lifes
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lives
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 and community has
an unfavorable effects
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unfavorable effects
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.
while
 there is no doubt that they
also
 have their merits
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other
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 side, in
this
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i
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 will support the view with examples. On the one hand, social networks
becomes
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facility
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a facility
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 for wasting
of
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a
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time .
for instance
, spending a lot of time on them especially teenagers ages who are responsible for
achievement
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the achievement
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academic
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of academic
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 curriculum and
development
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the development
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 of their skills.
on
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other
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another
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 reason, youngster are easily influenced by
wrong
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the wrong
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people
 and they attempt to imitate them.
furthermore
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,
veracity
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the veracity
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 of the news are untrustful so sometimes social media play a vital role to impair our comfort
by
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 specious news.
However
, social communication over all the world by networks site has
becoming
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become
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 more easily.
people
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People
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 can communicate with other
people
 in different countries,
they
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and they
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 can
also
 share their ideas and interests.
As a result
, They could evolve their interests by communicating with
people
 in
other city
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another city
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 that have
same
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concern
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concerns
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.
In addition
, social media could be a tool to influence
people
 by their inspirational person to educate
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them a
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a
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apply
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new skills and beginning
a good habits
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a good habit
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 .
for example
 ,
people
 may learn How to eat
a healthy food
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healthy food
a portion of healthy food
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 and
doing
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excrise
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exercise
everyday
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. In conclusion, many
people
 think that social sites
has
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have
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 a false effect on our communities , but they
also
has
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 an advantage for communication and development.
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