Some people think that in order to deal with the problem of congestion in cities, privately owned vehicles should be banned from the city center, while others consider this idea an unrealistic solution. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Traffic
jam has become one of the biggest problems nowadays. several
people
think that to solve
this
issue owned
cars
should be banned in
city
centres
.
This
essay will discuss both sides of view and my opinion . Many
people
want to solve the
traffic
issues . There they want privet
cars
to be banned in the
city
centres
. First , they want to decrease the amount of
cars
in the
city
centres
. By doing that many
traffic
issues will be solved . Many
people
who live lives in
city
centres
will be using different transportation . Second , if the owned
cars
have been banned from the
city
centres
the countries will have less pollution.
This
is
due to
the carbon dioxide that comes from the car's
exhaustcars
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exhaust cars
exhaust will be less .
However
, there are some
people
who know that
this
is an unrealistic solution . First , the government can not just ban
cars
in the
centres
of cities .
This
is
due to
people
already
have
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having
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multiple
cars
in the
city
centres
. Many
people
will not allow
this
to happen . Second , the other transportation will be crowded . By banning vehicles in
city
centres
people
will go to other transportation like the bus or train and taxis . Third , many
people
could not go to the
city
centres
if
this
happen
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happened
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. They can't because there are some
people
who have special needs .
This
is
due to
they need special equipment to transport or visit . My opinion is the
traffic
issues can't be solved by banning
cars
in the
centres
.
However
, there are many ways to solve
this
problem . In ,conclusion there are different ways to get away with
this
problem .
Also
banning
cars
in the
centres
of cities is not the only solution .
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