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In many countries, fast food is becoming cheaper and more widely available. ‎Do the disadvantages of this outweigh the advantages?‎

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The behaviour of diet is changing because of the development of fast
food
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 culture. It is affordable and easy to access
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 its widespread.
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, the nutrition contained in fast
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 is not healthy for humans.
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, the disadvantages of fast
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 outweigh the benefits. On the one hand, fast
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 provides a lower cost for people to feed themselves, and it is ubiquitous. Nowadays, the cost of foods and ingredients is expensive which is over expectation, thereby, purchasing fresh
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 is not affordable for everyone.
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, it is expensive to have dinner in restaurants.
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, in Hong Kong, a set of meals in a regular restaurant cost higher than minimum wage, not even a decent meal.
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, fast
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 chain restaurant,
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 as McDonald's, offers valuable
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 that most citizens with minimum wage could afford.
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, there are lower nutrients that humans should absorb every day contained in fast
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.
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, a burger set with fires and soda from McDonald's is providing a great amount of fat and various chemicals in seasoning. There was an experiment about junk
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 by American scientists, they reported that unhealthy
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 is a vital cause of increasing stomach cancer. Lower prices and the existing everywhere could provide convenience for consumers to buy, but it would make a crucial impact on individuals' health. In conclusion, in spite of the declining price of fast
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 could mitigate the financial burden for consumers, unhealthy ingredients still have an imperative impact on people. It is important that the fast
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 industry take responsibility for public health.
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