wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resource. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people believed that wild
animals
must not exist in
this
century.
Moreover
, they argue that keeping them is not beneficial. I
am completely disagree
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with
this
opinion. On the one hand, every species have a right to live on
this
planet.
Moreover
, there are humans that are
additional
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to their life. So, it is crucial to pay attention to the
animals
and keep them safe
as well as
they are
a
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special friends to us.
Additionally
, all sources like water, food, jungles and so on should
be spend
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and be a safe place for both humans and
animals
.
On the other hand
, not only mankind's are not the masters of species to make a decision for all
the
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creatures but
also
they should be more gentle in front of
the
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nature. All the people around the world are using gasoline and spreading co2 and no2 in the air which can damage and have
a
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detrimental effects
in
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humans
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and
animals
life
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the years.
Furthermore
, by expanding the cities they have been starting to destroy forests in order to build houses and villas.
Besides
, they harm the
animals
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environments and
destroys
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their houses for their own
benefits
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. So, people should not
makes
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any
animals
such
as wild
animals
disappear from their natural chain to have their own earnings. In conclusion, I am completely against
this
view because we don’t have a license to decide which kinds of
animals
should be alive and which
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should be extinct.
Hence
, I think it should be an obligation for anyone to keep all the creatures and our wonderful planet safe.
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