Some people think that having people from different nationalities and culture background to a country get a faster development. To what extend do you agree??

In
this
concurrent world , some individuals argue that
people
from different countries and cultures
are have
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more
benefit
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benefits
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in
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in-country
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country
growth. In fact , I strongly agree with
this
point of view for two reasons. To commence with,
people
move to a new
country
for a good job and they give their 100 % in
this
job so
deffinitely
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definitely
country
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the country
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get
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gets
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a good profit . Even though
asome
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some
might argue that
a
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other nationalities person take more benefit and do some fraud thing so
that is
not a tolerable thing for
country
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the country
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,I
stil
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still
believe that when any person
go
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to
the
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a
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new
country
so they have
good
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opportunity for promotion and they get good salary and bonus so that time they worked very hard for their personal benefit
as well as
country
increasing their economy .
Furthermore
, a different
culture
person
have
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some experiences in their own
culture
and they apply that tricks and
things
in other
culture
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cultures
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most of the time they get good
response
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responses
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. To explain
it
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apply
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, when they try some new
things
with different
culture
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cultures
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people
so they boost their knowledge and provide some new ideas and employed
it
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them
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. They share their
culturel
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cultural
things
,festival,traditional
things
and most important their
country
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country's
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history so
people
are more familiar with them .
Moreover
, when two and more different
culture
people
meet so they share
few
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extra knowledge and it is good in many ways like they behave friendly and
help
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each other.
Thus
, it is proved that
that
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things
are very beneficial for
country
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the country
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economy and
developement
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development
.
To conclude
, not only is it good for
country
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the country
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, but
also
very useful for learning some new
culture
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things
and
behaiviour
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behaviour
.
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