The graph shows average Household expenditure in 2019 and 2020.
The graph
illustrate
Change the verb form
illustrates
average
household expenditure in 2019 and 2020. And we doing comparing changes to years. And we Correct article usage
the average
are gives
from 2019 to 2020 years.
In 2019, education was 13 percentage and other products and services seven proportion so HealthcareChange the verb form
are given
are giving
5
%, housing was 20% and food was 55%.
In 2020, vacation 2020 years Add a missing verb
was 5
come
Add the particle
tocome
decline
Wrong verb form
declined
two
Change preposition
by two
percentage
. Other products and services go up Replace the word
per cent
18
% and healthcare Change preposition
by 18
to
20% rise. And housing decline Change preposition
by
one
percentage so it was 90% and food Change preposition
by one
was
declined Unnecessary verb
apply
41
%. So they a very big Change preposition
by 41
different
. But Replace the word
difference
other
side declined or go up better. And can be Correct article usage
the other
utilize
Wrong verb form
utilised
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