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Some people think that international news is important than the local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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 more
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 in some
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 minds when compared with national
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journalism
.
However
, there are people that
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 only defending local information. Both
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views put
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forward
 valid points but I Strongly believe that international news has more
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strongness
strangeness
 if compared with local. International news has a huge
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influence
 in the world since many business and
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 actions are made from daily important facts around the
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globe
. In
ither
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other
either
 words, trusting in the font of any information need to be
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accurate
 because many decisions can be made over it.
For example
: The submarine
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lost
 in the ocean,
while
 was in
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expediction
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expedition
, was found crushed after the
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 company
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neglected
 the security
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system
.
Local
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 journal has a certain impact on
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habitants'
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 lives.
Moreover
, some local
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businesses
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 can be affected
directlly
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directly
 by some good
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 bad facts. When some restaurant is closed generally local population want to know the cause as they want to decide if they want to support or not the owner even after closing the doors. In my view, the credibility of abroad magazine or a newspaper is
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rigorously
 tested it made me
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 safe to trust in
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informations publised
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information published
. In conclusion,
Although
 some people believe that local
jornalism
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journalism
 is the best research of information. Naturally, the quality and the abrangence of the
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news
 need to be the most import points to be considered.
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