Some people say reading the news on the internet is better. Others think newspapers will remain the most important sourse of news for the majority of people. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

Many
people
tell reading the news on the
Internet
is better. Others think newspapers will remain the most important source of news for the majority of
people
. We think reading very easily
in
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the
internet
. Because the
internet
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well-known in my country. So it can be we
are gives
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lots of important and interesting things.
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, all
the
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people
believe that the
internet
is very useful. But, it's had some bad sides. And so much it had important information. So we
are gives
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very famous
people
about life. And at
some
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no information we
are gives
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are given
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lots of useful
advise
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.
However
,
all
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the
people
don't believe
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internet
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. Because it had some bad things news.
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