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Some people think that governments should give financial support to creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
Artists
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 play a vital role in a country, when they contribute
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reputation
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the reputation
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 of the nation
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 their works of
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. People hold conflicting views about whether creative
artists
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 should be given financial
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 or funded by alternative sources.
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 people believed that designers ought to be supported by other sources. I would argue both opinions before forming my point of view. On the one hand,
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 deserve economic
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 from the government
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 the fact that music and arts are considered
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a symbol of a country.
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, all the creative works of
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 are the source of artist's
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 matter, so they need the government's help to boost their imagination.
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also
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 have incredible talent to make things alive, which can enhance the quality of life.
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,
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 and music show the lifestyle of the author so
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emotions should be shared easily.
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,
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artists
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, who aren’t well-known but their outstanding
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skills
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, governments can make offers with financial
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 for them to increase their popularity worldwide.
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, without funding,
artists
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 can not develop their paintings and melodies.
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, when we are living in a state-of-the-
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 society with the innovation of technical devices.
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such
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 as musicians,
painters
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and painters
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 can get a huge attraction easily from the public via social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, and Twitter, which can provide them
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 followers and well-paid jobs. The reason is that they can showcase their talented skills to social media companies, which can afford them everything about the demands of their areas, it is
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 an opportunity for them to enhance
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 of
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.
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, With the tenacity of
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 and their
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 matter, when they are trying to improve
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 all over the world. From my point of view,
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they
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the
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they
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 deserve to be given financial
support
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 from governments and other sources
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