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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today is the era of advanced science and
technology
. In the
last
 few years, it has grown rapidly and has brought significant impacts on all aspects of human life. Specifically,
children
 have changed their habit activities in their spare
time
. From my perspective,
this
 tendency has the drawbacks outweigh the benefits and I will explain the reason in
this
 essay. One of the most significant problems is that the arrival of the Internet allows
children
 to have access to unlimited information and applications at any
time
. It is natural for
children
 to be curious, and they are not mature enough to distinguish the detrimental effects that
technology
 devices
attack
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 them.
For instance
, with the flash IT revolution moving forward, many game software were produced to serve entertainment needs. At a young age, they normally are attracted by social media and games so they are willing to
use
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spend
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 all their
time
 on them which leads to many physical and mental health problems. Another disadvantage is that through
technology
,
children
could
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 keep in touch with friends from everywhere so they do not have to go out to meet them face to face like they used to in the past but through video calls.
This
 issue increases social isolation. Youngsters now are easily prone to the virtual world where friends can be AI and they use it as a place to hide from reality. Using it several times could bring some temporary comfort but in the long run, teenagers may no longer be aware of the boundary between real and virtual and they rely more on them.
Nevertheless
, it has become an integral part of modern life.
To sum up
,
technology
 has harmfully changed
children
's lives from outdoors to indoors.
In particular
, most of their free
time
 is spent on internet activities with electronic tools.
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