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Some parents believe cellphones are harmful to children, while others disagree. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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The effects of cell
phones
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 on
children
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 have been a topic of heated debate in recent years.
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 they appear to have some negative effects, which is what I don't really agree with because there is plenty of evidence suggesting that
children
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 can benefit from them in a number of ways. It is true that mobile
phones
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 can be harmful to
children
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 in different ways.
First,
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if a child can use a cellphone, he or she will have access to the Internet and be susceptible to all the negativities in it.
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, violent movies or video clips may affect
children
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's behaviour, even leading them to commit crimes.
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since there are a large number of games on mobile
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,
children
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 will be more likely to be addicted to them, causing a variety of other issues. In fact, game-addicted students usually have poor academic performance and experience many health problems
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 the very lack of physical activities.
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, some argue that mobile
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 can bring broad-based benefits if parents let their heirs use them for studying purposes. Having no access to the Internet may limit a child's ability to learn and explore the world. In fact, any student should be encouraged to do online research for their subjects as it's highly convenient.
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, mobile
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 can help enhance the connection between parents and their heirs.
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, thanks to Facebook and other social media platforms, a father or a mother would have a better understanding of his or her
children
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 because they are inclined to open themselves up when they go online. To summarize, mobile
phones
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 are both harmful and useful to the young to a certain extent. In my opinion, I agree that cell
phones
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 can lead to some problems for
children
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, but only when parents don't pay close attention to their heirs.
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