Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology.in what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people made? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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we can see significant changes in
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in communication and relationships. The
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our community and relationships and provide
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advantages and disadvantages ways . In terms of advantages most communities believe that
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to learn anywhere and anytime the main reason given to support
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technology
increases in many universities and colleges for
students
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of
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online and when I am at work it
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our life
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and study whatever ,
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ages , the costs. In
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, we will see
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money or admission charge ,
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charges .
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technology
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our
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people get married and have a boyfriend or girlfriends. In conclusion ,
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because they are afraid to get married the way to contact
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other partners just online they do not need to see each other they did not feel any emotion for each other
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when they meet each other .
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I believe that we just need more communication no need to talk online .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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